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3/18/2010

100 Word Challenge - Unspoken

What follows is in response to the 100 Word Challenge, normally authored by the loquacious Velvet Verbosity, but this time, in fact, it's being proffered by ... Me. The Word, this week, is 'Unspoken'. The temporary new site for the 100 Word Challenge is here.

100 Word Challenge


Unrequited


"I tell you, Jimmy ... Mark is sooo dreamy, he's, like, perfect. He's so smart, and he's so good at sports, and he's sooo handsome. He just makes me feel like Jello."

Jimmy and Peg had been friends since either one of them could remember. They grew up next door to each other. They played together, they ate meals together, took naps together and even were in the same class all through school.

"I gotta go, Jimmy. Later, huh?"

"Yeah, sure, Peg."

Jimmy watched her go. Tears came to his eyes, his throat tightened up, his love unrequited, his passion, unspoken.


Ndinombethe.

15 comments:

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Lovely post, such a sentimental piece.

Ok, I confess I am really lost ... I do not know why I thought it was Hidden, it is Unspoken.
Hhmmm... must be I am doing too many memes!lol

hugs
shakira

PJ said...

This tugs at my heart. Wonderfully written.

Grandmother said...

I was cheering: "Say it! Say it!" as I read it. So much gets missed when our truth goes unspoken.

Big Mark 243 said...

Very heartfelt. I felt like I was Jimmy, with my heart being shredded by Peg's words.

Tara R. said...

Very touching... beautifully written.

moneythoughts said...

Very nice master wordsmith.

Lee of MWOB said...

Nice Lou. I didn't count but I assume that sweet piece was 100 words. And what 100 words that most everyone can relate to.

Hope you have a great day!

Lee

Joyce-Anne said...

You just know that Jimmy is the right guy for Peg. Beautifully written.

Life with Kaishon said...

Oh. So sad : (. Unrequited love. At least he is a baby : ) and he will have millions of more chances!

Teresa O said...

I wonder...how many times this happens every day. Sweetly poignant.

Nevine said...

And all of those "unspokens" suffocate us, in the end. A sad and beautifully expressed story, Lou.

Nevine

PattiKen said...

Awww... That is so poignant! Because I know you are a romantic, I just know that things will work out for Jimmy and Peg. One day she'll look at him, and realize the magic of loving your best friend.

Beautiful, Lou.

LceeL said...

Shakira CK: Thank you, Shakira - You did wind up getting it right.

PJ: Thank you, PJ.

Grandmother: Sometimes it's so hard to know when to speak.

Big Mark 243: You are a very empathetic man, my Brother.

Tara R: Thank you, Tara.

Moneythoughts: Thank you, Fred.

Lee of MWOB: Thank you, Lee.

Joyce-Anne: Thank you, Joyce-Anne.

Life with Kaishon: Yes, he will. Hopefully.

Teresa O: I wonder, as well.

Nevine: Thank you, Nevine.

PattiKen: I hope she does, anyway.

Hyphen Mama said...

And in 20 years, they would be married and tell their children how they'd grown up together and were "just friends".

Jen said...

that was great! great word too. I am behind, just posted Sanitary, thought that was still on.